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This is a gripping story. My favorite sentence is, "Cassidy trained his eyes upon David with the stillness of a sniper."

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Thanks for saying so, Bill! It was a risky one at the time of writing, for sure. But I think it’s got some beautiful bits that I really wanted to share.

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Mar 16Liked by Andrei Atanasov

This story is so thought provoking. Thank you Andrei.

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I’m glad. Plenty more coming.

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Damn. This story is fire. What I enjoy about your writing especially is how seamlessly you get into the shoes of any kind of protagonist/narrator and time. I know it's a lot of work and research, so bravo!

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Thanks, my friend! I really pay close attention to voice. That’s perhaps why I’m so much more prolific in nonfiction than fiction, because my own voice is easy to nail down. I employ the same standard for most of my characters as I do for me: I need to hear their voice in my head, feel what it’s like to be them. That takes a heavy emotional toll, but it’s the only way I know to write fiction.

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I can imagine how hard it can be, especially writing characters that are nuanced or bad or conflicting. You're doing an outstanding job.

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🫡👏🏻

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May 7Liked by Andrei Atanasov

Good story, tense and raw, thank you

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No, thank YOU for reading and the kind words!

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“Then he started dreaming about being a hero.” Gripping, tragic. Well done!

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Appreciate it! Thank you so much for reading.

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Apr 9Liked by Andrei Atanasov

Winner Andrei, I'm new here and poking around. First story I chose and it's a great one. Thanks for sharing - Jim

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Thanks so much for subscribing and reading, Jim!

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Mar 19Liked by Andrei Atanasov

A story that disturbed me.

You really have something in the character of David -- would you consider writing another story featuring him before his (presumably) untimely death?

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Wow. Well. First, thank you so much for your words. Second, I’m not usually one for sequels, and it’s been a while since I wrote this story so I don’t feel very emotionally connected to David anymore. But never say never. There might come more of David at some point. I think his childhood in particular would be interesting to explore.

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Mar 18Liked by Andrei Atanasov

Jesus, Andrei. Powerful. What a sensational (and dark) ending. I honestly wasn't expecting that when the gun was pulled.

You painted a rich set of characters and context with such few words here. Bravo!

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Appreciate it, Nathan! Coming from you, it really means a lot. I was anxious when I posted this (as one should be, I suppose), as I hadn’t given it a read-through in years. It’s always had a special place in my heart, though, and it seems it’s stood the test of time. I still think many parts of this are quite good.

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Mar 18Liked by Andrei Atanasov

Definitely! Thank you for digging it out and sharing it.

That anxiety is always a sign that something is good ;)

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Mar 17Liked by Andrei Atanasov

What a good story! Congratulations! 😀

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🤯🎉👌🏻 Thank you, Sara!

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